Writing Technique For Tanka

Written for:  Carpe Diem Tanka Splendor #1, Teika’s first of ten tanka writing techniques
1. Mystery and depth – yūgentei, the image evoking ineffable loneliness

This category is associated mostly with Fujiwara Shunzei (1114-1204) Teika’s renowned father and tanka expert. Teika mentions this in some of his other teachings and uses as examples poem #3:254 Kin’yōshū by Toshiyori:

cries of quail
from the shore of Mano cove
winds blow
waves of plume grass
ripple in autumn dusk

my birthplace
buried under crimson leaves
fallen in the garden
sedge grass from the eaves
melancholy autumn wind

#5:533 Shinkokinshū: 

hidden waterfall
the sound of falling water resonates
against the rough mountain
in a distance a temple bell
moves with the sound of water

© Chèvrefeuille (our host)

Here is my attempt:

Mourning doves
fog conceals what is to come
there is only one
lost dove calls to its mate
waiting for his love to return

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I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are in the process of returning to New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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